A Very Small Miracle

Jul 10, 2015 10:42
This morning, I went to co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.

I choose a rice ball and a drink box.

The total price of them was 227 yen.

In my wallet, there are some coins and a 5000 yen bill.

I thought I have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there was one 100 yen coin, two 50 yen coins, two 10 yen coins, one 5 yen coin, and two 1 yen coins.

It was perfectly completely matching!

Now, my wallet is very light, hehe.
No. 1　sheodox's correction
  • A Very Small Miracle
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • This morning, I went to co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.
  • This morning, I went to my university's co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.
  • I choose a rice ball and a drink box.
  • I chose a rice ball and a drink box.
  • The total price of them was 227 yen.
  • The total price of them was 227 yen.
  • In my wallet, there are some coins and a 5000 yen bill.
  • In my wallet, there are were some coins and a 5000 yen bill.
  • I thought I have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there was one 100 yen coin, two 50 yen coins, two 10 yen coins, one 5 yen coin, and two 1 yen coins.
  • I thought I would have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there was one 100 yen coin, two 50 yen coins, two 10 yen coins, one 5 yen coin, and two 1 yen coins.
  • It was perfectly completely matching!
  • It was the perfect amount!
    　「I had the perfect amount of change!」ももっと自然ように聞こえると思います。
  • Now, my wallet is very light, hehe.
  • Now, my wallet is very light, hehe.
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
No. 2　OncomingStorm's correction
  • A Very Small Miracle
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • This morning, I went to co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.
  • This morning, I went to the co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.
  • I choose a rice ball and a drink box.
  • I choose chose a rice ball and a drink box.
  • The total price of them was 227 yen.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • In my wallet, there are some coins and a 5000 yen bill.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I thought I have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there was one 100 yen coin, two 50 yen coins, two 10 yen coins, one 5 yen coin, and two 1 yen coins.
  • I thought I would have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there was one 100 yen coin, two 50 yen coins, two 10 yen coins, one 5 yen coin, and two 1 yen coins.
  • It was perfectly completely matching!
  • It was perfectly and completely matching!
    　perfectly and completely mean the same thing you could drop the "and completely" and it would still make sense.
  • Now, my wallet is very light, hehe.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
kanotown
Thank you so much for the corrections! :)
No. 3　rongpepsi's correction
  • This morning, I went to co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.
  • This morning, I went to the co-op store of my university and bought my breakfast.
  • I choose a rice ball and a drink box.
  • I choose onea rice ball serve and one kinda drink box.
  • The total price of them was 227 yen.
  • The total price of them was 227 yen.
  • In my wallet, there are some coins and a 5000 yen bill.
  • In my wallet, there weare some coins and thea bill of 5000 yen bill.
  • I thought I have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there was one 100 yen coin, two 50 yen coins, two 10 yen coins, one 5 yen coin, and two 1 yen coins.
  • I thought I would have to use the bill, but when I counted the coins, there wasere sonme 100 yekinds of coins, twosuch 50as yen coins,e twof 100 yen, ctwoins, onef 50 yen coin, and two of 10 yen coins.
  • It was perfectly completely matching!
  • It was perfectly coampleountely matof chinarg!e.
kanotown
Thank you so much for the corrections!
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